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What is a cellphone? a cellphone "is a(an) electronic device used to make telephone calls across a wide geographic area, served by many public cells, allowing the user to be mobile. By contrast, a cordless telephone is used only within the range of a single, private base station, for example within a home or an office." Cellphones now a day(nowadays) have different gadgets such as TV, Internet, Social Networks, MP3 players, 8.0 mpx etc. With these gadgets people get attached to their cellphones. Cellphones have a lot of restrictions, one of the clearest examples is cellphone (its) use while driving; it´s common but controversial. Being distracted while operating a motor vehicle has been shown to increase the risk of accident(accidents). Because of this, many jurisdictions prohibit the use of mobile phones while driving. another(Another) good example is the usage of cellphones in schools, they limit or restrict the use of mobile phones. Schools set restrictions on the use of mobile phones because of the use of cell phones for cheating on tests, harassment and bullying, causing threats to the schools security, distractions to the students, and facilitating gossip and other social activity in school. Besides this(,) cellphones have been proven to damage the health of the user because they use electromagnetic radiation in the microwaverange, which some believe may be harmful to human health. In conclusion try to use less your cellphone, it distracts and harms you!

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